The place was pitch dark,
sounds of water splashing on the walls,
and i had no space to move,
i was lying there,unmoved..
Was in the same position as ever,
the place was itself my cover,
but then,cant find a better place,
every blood and water covered my face..
I slept the whole day and night,
in spite of not knowing how days look like,
water splashed on my face regularly,
wondered why i could not open my eyes,yet..
My mouth,made no sound,
was like an egg,laid on the ground,
i rarely moved,my bare legs around,
and still my hands were close to my mouth..
The place was just like a heaven,
no other place,was so Divine,
i was kept safe,healthy and fine,
and the time came,stretched my legs for the first time..
At last something hard touched me,
first time i heard myself cry,
and i saw the day,it was very bright,
there i came out,as a new born baby..
sounds of water splashing on the walls,
and i had no space to move,
i was lying there,unmoved..
Was in the same position as ever,
the place was itself my cover,
but then,cant find a better place,
every blood and water covered my face..
I slept the whole day and night,
in spite of not knowing how days look like,
water splashed on my face regularly,
wondered why i could not open my eyes,yet..
My mouth,made no sound,
was like an egg,laid on the ground,
i rarely moved,my bare legs around,
and still my hands were close to my mouth..
The place was just like a heaven,
no other place,was so Divine,
i was kept safe,healthy and fine,
and the time came,stretched my legs for the first time..
At last something hard touched me,
first time i heard myself cry,
and i saw the day,it was very bright,
there i came out,as a new born baby..
11 comments:
nice post machan
hey nice one:)u have brought t out n a nice way:)
hey cool one.... u jus need a person to rune that into a song...
hey sorry! tats tune.. not rune
"i was lying there,unmoved.."
Babies do move inside the womb :).. They must! hmm.. your poems aren't like poems.. as in, its simple, straight forward n understandable.. Poems generally are like an enigma.. But u write well.. Very well.. :).. Constructive criticism ok.. I m no great poet..
reply to divya..
hmmm..wat u say s rit..after al,am jus a beginner..;)and i dont wanna confuse any1 wit hard words,and high std vocab....;)and babies move inside,but be in the same positon rit??;)
@ Shyam.. No no.. positions do change.. :).. some babies come head on.. some babies come legs on :P during birth.. Now.. this is too much of an explanation.. anyways.. babies do move change position n all.. go study biology..
hey...your poems were simply superb....din know u had tis big talent in u shyam....
its actually difficult to write poems than writin books...
and its even more difficult to make people read poems wit involment than readin books...
and u did it shyam....and tat too for a beginner its seriously good to write poems like tis...
keep goin,......
keep tis spirit in u....and reach great heights...
YOU NEED NOT B GREAT TO START BUT YOU HAVE TO START SOMEWHERE TO BECOME GREAT......
.............
u r becomin great...(yaenakae 2 muchha thaeriyuthu..)lol
but still ...wanna tel u tat i loved ur poems and want u to write many more poems ...(shakespeare ra thokadichida maatiyae?)lol...
KEEP GOIN..SHYAAAAAAAAAM!
Hey they were just brilliant !!! A very nice way to have framed the rite words !!
Jus came across yo blog ...
This one is really creative ...
There is no better place on earth except WOMB..Good work!!
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